Can someone find me a desk to match this bedroom set?

ohhana

I prefer Wal-Mart online for the desk, since that's the only store we have where I live. I would really appreciate if someone could help match a desk to this bedroom set as that is what I have now.

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http://www.walmart.com/ip/Sauder-New-Cottage-Desk-and-3-in-1-Stand-Value-Bundle-Antiqued-Black/13221984

http://www.walmart.com/ip/Sauder-Shoal-Creek-Computer-Desk/16207839

http://www.walmart.com/ip/Sauder-Beginnings-Desk-Cinnamon-Cherry-Finish/20566847

http://www.walmart.com/ip/Bush-Stanford-Collection-Computer-Desk-Antique-Black-and-Cherry/4256073

Will any of these work? Pulled from the Walmart website . . . . Hope they help.

I have a lot of things that I need to sell before an international move. What is the fastest way to sell them?

Anonymous

Answer
Sell things in bundles, like an entire bedroom set, living room, kitchen, for a good price, saving buyers money. Advertise on craigslist, thrifty newspaper, church, friends, flyers. Get everyone involved.

Pay someone to pass out flyers with what you have to sell and have a one day sale only and see if you can generate a lot of buyers.

Much luck.

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Is it ok to set up a baby's room in the basement.?

Celine

I have just purchased a new house, but there is nothing done in it (it only has 4 walls and insulation).
My boyfriend and I are creating the floor plan, but there is not enough room for two bedrooms on the main floor. We don't have any children yet, but we were planning on puting a second bedroom in the basement (we are going to finish the whole basement properly and also we are going to install heated floors).

My question is, is it ok to put a baby's room in the basement (when we are going to have children, they will stay in our bedroom up to about 6 months or so)

Thank you !!

Answer
haha of course its fine!
As long as its safe and you purchase a good baby monitor once you move your precious little bundle to his or her own room, you should be alright.

but i would have the baby sleep in your room until around 6 months, because if something was to happen, you wouldn't know it if he was in the basement.

good luck!

My bedroom was in the basement for 10 years.

new style for 13 girl bedroom?

**mikaila*

me and my 9 year old sister share a room and there is a sheet hanging from the roof in the middle of our room dividing our "half"s. my half is 5 feet 3 inches wide, and 11 feet 10 inches long. i am looking for a new style for my bedroom. i dont have that much money. (ok, so no money) what can i do to change the look of my bedroom and make it look cooler for when i have friends over?
umm.. thnx. but when i said i had limeted money, it ment my familey cant aford to buy ANYTHING. thnx for the idea though. i will try and save some money up from babysitting to paint the walls to match my quilt.

Answer
We're the same age :)

Anyways, what I would do is I would ask my mom if she could buy me a new comforter and pillows to match. I would try to show her that I put thought into it, as in go online and search for stores that sell comforter sets and look for the one I want to match the paint on my walls. You can do that, go to store's sites online like JC Penny's or AJmoss and look at the comforters they sell. JC Penny has pretty cheap bedding so your mom wont spend that much, and a little change can make you feel alot better.
Try to change up your bed anyway possible. If your bed leans against a wall, stack the pillows in the middle against the wall, so it looks like a couch or something where you can hang out. Or, if your beds in a corner, bundle the pillows up in a corner and so on.
I really dont know what else to say, but I feel for you! I have to share a bedroom with my sister, and it aint fun! But I'm trying to convince my parents to let me have the computer room :D

Goodluck, hope I helped!

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Would it be safe or effective to blow out the pilot on my heater?

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Drunkenmim

I keep the thermostat in my trailer as low as it will go, 50F, but the heater still comes on. I really dont need it, i run an electric one in the bedroom where I sleep, and bundle up around the house otherwise. It is very drafty, and a waste of money to heat the whole place. I have one of those in-wall-set standing heaters in the hallway with the pilot at the bottom. If i blow out the pilot, is that safe? will it still emit gas? ....would it be effective?

Answer
There should be a gas shutoff somewhere that would be better to shut off. If you blow out the pilot light it will only be ok if everything is working properly. There should be a button that lets you light the pilot and a thermostat that won't let the gas turn on unless the pilot light is lit. If they are all working it will be ok.

How can I get my nearly year old terrier mix housetrained?

arabianlad

This sweet spayed female won't learn to potty outside...I work nights and leave her in with my other terrier-who I think has reverted to a house mistake now and then too...I have to sleep days...can't leave them out because of neighbors. Don't expect them to hold it forever but the female always does her duty inside! I'm at my wits end with this little bundle of energy.

Answer
A puppy is like a baby. He will relieve himself anywhere, anytime. Because a newly adopted adult dog is unfamiliar with your home, he may not understand where he should "go"! Housetraining, or teaching your dog to go outside to relieve himself, is an important lesson your dog must learn.
It is up to you, the new parent, to housetrain your new puppy or dog with patience, love and understanding.
CRATE TRAINING
In the wild, wolves live in a den or cave. It is important the entire wolf pack keep this area clean. The same idea works with your family pet. Your dog’s crate is his home, his bedroom. It is likely that your dog will not like to soil his bed. Therefore, he will wait until he is let out to do his business.
HOUSETRAINING WITH YOUR CRATE
On average, puppies can hold their bladders one hour for every month they have been alive, plus one hour. For example, if you have a three month old puppy, he can wait 3 + 1 = 4 hours. If you work longer than this, the best solution is to have someone (a neighbour, a relative, a dog walker) come in at an appropriate time to let your dog out.

100 PER CENT SUPERVISION
Supervision is the key to housetraining! While you are at home, your dog must be supervised. Whether you are watching television, making dinner, on the phone or on the computer, your puppy must be watched. While it sounds like an impossible task, it isn’t. Keeping the crate in a social part of the house makes it easier. Using a house lead – a small, thin lead with a little clip on it – also helps immensely. Outside, you put a lead on your dog so you can control him. If the lead is removed after returning home, control is lost. For example, when watching television, have the lead tied to a couch leg. Your dog can have his blanket and toys with him. He’ll feel safe and comfortable. The majority of accidents happen when your pup wanders off and you haven’t noticed. You don’t want him to sneak off into the kitchen and find a puddle a short time later. If your pup is kept from wandering, the possibility of an accident is diminished because he will not eliminate where he is sitting. 100 per cent supervision means ensuring your dog is playing with you, in his crate, outside or on his house lead.

SCHEDULING
In the morning, take your dog outside. He should urinate and possibly have a bowel movement. Spend about five to seven minutes with him and then bring him in. Do not play with him yet. Feed him breakfast, either in the crate or with the lead, and supervise it. If your pup did not have a bowel movement earlier, take him back outside about 15 minutes after he has eaten. Use the lead to keep your pup moving along while outside. Otherwise, he may start sniffing, stopping and playing to avoid the job at hand. You can say “hurry up” and your dog will begin to associate these words with the task at hand. Praise him excessively when he has eliminated. Bring him back in the house and place him in his crate if you are going to work. Continue to supervise him with the crate or the lead if you are home. When returning after being out, go directly to the crate, let him out, praise him and put him back in. Feed him his meal, take him outside 15 minutes after he has eaten, praise him after he eliminates, and bring him back in. Continue to follow the same steps consistently.

While you are home, you should take your pup outside on a regular basis. Even if your pup is in a crate or on a house lead, he still needs the opportunity to eliminate. Also, be careful what you wish for! A pup who barks to go outside may be cute and clever now. However, you must try not to fall into the habit of leaping up every time your dog wants in or out. It is a very submissive gesture on your part. Have your pup wait a moment or two.

Setting up a schedule is also a good idea. If your pup is under four months of age, take him out for five minutes every hour on the hour. If your pup is over four months old, take him out every second hour on the hour. The schedule will help you remember when to take him out. Go out for five minutes only. It provides the opportunity to eliminate even if your pup may not need to go. Take your dog out after active play and also after napping. If an accident occurs, you may have forgotten to take him out .

FEEDING TIME
Having a puppy drink a lot of water and then placing him in his crate is much more unkind than letting him be a bit thirsty for an hour or two. Adult dogs should have access to drinking water at all times. However, this is not the case for untrained pups. Most parents will not allow their children to drink a big glass of water before going to bed. Avoid setting your pup up for failure. Restrict his water intake to three or four drinks daily and make sure you remove the water dish about three hours before bedtime. This will help your dog sleep more comfortably.

If it is a hot evening, supply your pup with a few ice cubes. They will enter your dog’s system at a slower pace. When feeding your pup, provide a high-quality food that is a good source of protein. The food must be concentrated so your puppy’s body doesn’t require much of it. If you feed less, your puppy eliminates less. Food is directly related to how well puppies do in their housetraining.

EXERCISE
It is important that your pup gets a lot of exercise, especially while crate training. You can play fetch, chase or hide and seek in your home. You can call ‘come’ at the same time to provide further training. Anyway you do it, your pup needs to be able to run and play.

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How can I get my nearly year old terrier mix housetrained?

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arabianlad

This sweet spayed female won't learn to potty outside...I work nights and leave her in with my other terrier-who I think has reverted to a house mistake now and then too...I have to sleep days...can't leave them out because of neighbors. Don't expect them to hold it forever but the female always does her duty inside! I'm at my wits end with this little bundle of energy.

Answer
A puppy is like a baby. He will relieve himself anywhere, anytime. Because a newly adopted adult dog is unfamiliar with your home, he may not understand where he should "go"! Housetraining, or teaching your dog to go outside to relieve himself, is an important lesson your dog must learn.
It is up to you, the new parent, to housetrain your new puppy or dog with patience, love and understanding.
CRATE TRAINING
In the wild, wolves live in a den or cave. It is important the entire wolf pack keep this area clean. The same idea works with your family pet. Your dog’s crate is his home, his bedroom. It is likely that your dog will not like to soil his bed. Therefore, he will wait until he is let out to do his business.
HOUSETRAINING WITH YOUR CRATE
On average, puppies can hold their bladders one hour for every month they have been alive, plus one hour. For example, if you have a three month old puppy, he can wait 3 + 1 = 4 hours. If you work longer than this, the best solution is to have someone (a neighbour, a relative, a dog walker) come in at an appropriate time to let your dog out.

100 PER CENT SUPERVISION
Supervision is the key to housetraining! While you are at home, your dog must be supervised. Whether you are watching television, making dinner, on the phone or on the computer, your puppy must be watched. While it sounds like an impossible task, it isn’t. Keeping the crate in a social part of the house makes it easier. Using a house lead – a small, thin lead with a little clip on it – also helps immensely. Outside, you put a lead on your dog so you can control him. If the lead is removed after returning home, control is lost. For example, when watching television, have the lead tied to a couch leg. Your dog can have his blanket and toys with him. He’ll feel safe and comfortable. The majority of accidents happen when your pup wanders off and you haven’t noticed. You don’t want him to sneak off into the kitchen and find a puddle a short time later. If your pup is kept from wandering, the possibility of an accident is diminished because he will not eliminate where he is sitting. 100 per cent supervision means ensuring your dog is playing with you, in his crate, outside or on his house lead.

SCHEDULING
In the morning, take your dog outside. He should urinate and possibly have a bowel movement. Spend about five to seven minutes with him and then bring him in. Do not play with him yet. Feed him breakfast, either in the crate or with the lead, and supervise it. If your pup did not have a bowel movement earlier, take him back outside about 15 minutes after he has eaten. Use the lead to keep your pup moving along while outside. Otherwise, he may start sniffing, stopping and playing to avoid the job at hand. You can say “hurry up” and your dog will begin to associate these words with the task at hand. Praise him excessively when he has eliminated. Bring him back in the house and place him in his crate if you are going to work. Continue to supervise him with the crate or the lead if you are home. When returning after being out, go directly to the crate, let him out, praise him and put him back in. Feed him his meal, take him outside 15 minutes after he has eaten, praise him after he eliminates, and bring him back in. Continue to follow the same steps consistently.

While you are home, you should take your pup outside on a regular basis. Even if your pup is in a crate or on a house lead, he still needs the opportunity to eliminate. Also, be careful what you wish for! A pup who barks to go outside may be cute and clever now. However, you must try not to fall into the habit of leaping up every time your dog wants in or out. It is a very submissive gesture on your part. Have your pup wait a moment or two.

Setting up a schedule is also a good idea. If your pup is under four months of age, take him out for five minutes every hour on the hour. If your pup is over four months old, take him out every second hour on the hour. The schedule will help you remember when to take him out. Go out for five minutes only. It provides the opportunity to eliminate even if your pup may not need to go. Take your dog out after active play and also after napping. If an accident occurs, you may have forgotten to take him out .

FEEDING TIME
Having a puppy drink a lot of water and then placing him in his crate is much more unkind than letting him be a bit thirsty for an hour or two. Adult dogs should have access to drinking water at all times. However, this is not the case for untrained pups. Most parents will not allow their children to drink a big glass of water before going to bed. Avoid setting your pup up for failure. Restrict his water intake to three or four drinks daily and make sure you remove the water dish about three hours before bedtime. This will help your dog sleep more comfortably.

If it is a hot evening, supply your pup with a few ice cubes. They will enter your dog’s system at a slower pace. When feeding your pup, provide a high-quality food that is a good source of protein. The food must be concentrated so your puppy’s body doesn’t require much of it. If you feed less, your puppy eliminates less. Food is directly related to how well puppies do in their housetraining.

EXERCISE
It is important that your pup gets a lot of exercise, especially while crate training. You can play fetch, chase or hide and seek in your home. You can call ‘come’ at the same time to provide further training. Anyway you do it, your pup needs to be able to run and play.

Please help with small surround sound options for bedroom?

Neil B

Is there a high quality, but small size surround sound for bedroom that is wireless? I don't know how to set it up, and don't want wires everywhere.
We won't need something that is too loud (watts). Looking for small size, but killer sound experience.
Easy set up, good cost/possible Blue Ray bundle, wireless.
Thank you for your time. Cheers!

Answer
For small speakers. I suggest the KEF1005.1 series(ebay you can get them for a good price). Rocketfish makes a wireless kit you can get at best buy for a decent price.

Throw in a ps3 for the blu-ray and you are set.

grab a decent 5.1 receiver Panasonic, Denon, Yamaha off ebay.

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What is the best way to sell my house online?

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Noj

I am also looking for the most cost efficient method.

Answer
It depends on where you live. If you live in a city that has a subdivision of "Craigslist", which in NY is newyork.craigslist.com (check www.craigslist.com ) and then go to the rightside of that main page to see if your city is listed. If so, click on that city, and then enter in your listing under "homes for sale".

Put in as much information as you can. Put in pictures on the ad. Have an open house on a sunday from say 1:00 - 2:30 PM. Make sure you get everyone's phone # and e-mail address before they leave your home! Make sure you find out what the buyer wants before they come to your home! If they're looking for a 3-bedroom thats 1200 square feet and a 2-car garage, and you have a 4-bedroom that is 1500 square feet, with no garage, tell them this, so that you won't waste you rtime and theirs.

To get a price in mind to sell your home at, go to www.realtor.com and enter in your city's info, and search for similar homes. Price your home accordingly.

When you get offers, find out what % they can put down, when they can close, and how much they make, and where they live now and how much they pay.

Consider all offers, because someone that offers less than you're looking for, but can put down 20% is much more likely to get a loan than someone that offers a higher price but can only put down 3% or so.

After you get that all set, or even before, look for an attorney to do the paperwork for you. Very simple. So, you do NOT need a realtor to help you!! I've sold 2 of my homes this way, and saved obviously a bundle.

Good luck!

How much money would be needed?

CASLA

...for the software, computer, and the additional things needed to make a bedroom into a recording studio?

Answer
It's going to depend a lot on what you're going to be recording. If you're going to produce all the sounds on the computer, you'll need a really fast computer, sequencing software, and software sound modules that you install on your hard drive that produce the actual sounds. Figure $2000 for the computer, $400 for the sequencing software, and about $500 for the sounds.

If you're looking to record keyboards onto the computer, you won't need the sound module, but you will need some way to get the keyboard sounds into the computer. If you're lucky, and you only want to record one keyboard, if it has a USB port on the back, you can plug it directly into the computer. If it doesn't, or if you want to record multiple instruments at the same time, you'll need a mixing board. You can get one for as little as $30 or $40, but it's going to be very limited in what you can do, and you'll quickly outgrow it. It's my experience that mixers with knobs to control the volume are a PITA. Plan on spending at least $150 for a mixer with volume sliders, called "faders". When you get a mixer, look at getting one with "phantom power" (I'll explain in a moment). If the mixer comes with built-in effect, that's even better--nothing makes a recording sound flat and amateur more than having a completely "dry" (no effects at all) sound. Also look and see what extras are packaged with the mixer. You might find that you can buy a $400 mixer, and it comes bundled with sequencing software, so it ends up saving you money. Throw in a C-note or so for cables, and we're looking at a minimum of $2500 for computer, mixer and cables. This assumes you have (or can borrow) the keyboards.

If you want to add guitars into things, some people have had luck doing "direct injection", where the output of the amp is plugged directly into the mixer. If that just doesn't work for you, you'll need to buy at least one microphone, a mic stand, and a cable. A "middle of the road" dynamic mic with stand and cable would add about $100 to the cost, so now, we're looking at $2600.

If you want to add vocals, unless your vocalist is a screamer, you'd probably want a "condenser" microphone. They're much more responsive to subtle changes in the sound, do make the vocalist sound better. Condenser mics generally require phantom power, so even if you're not doing vocals right now, it's nice to have it in the mixer for when you want it If you know exactly what you're looking for, and catch a sale, a reasonable condenser can be bought for $100, but usually $200 or so will get you a better sounding microphone. Add in a stand, "pop filter" (really necessary for vocals), cables and maybe a "shock mount" for the mic (if it doesn't come with one) and you're probably looking at $300, so that would bring your total up to $2900. Warning: Condenser mics get very expensive very quickly--it's not unusual for professional recording studios to have mics that are $3000 to $4000. Each. I happened to inherit a couple of vintage Neumanns from my father that are actually worth more than my car, and are kept safely tucked away in a safety deposit box.

So we're at $2900. You'll also need stands for the keyboards and mixer--if you need one of each, that's about another $125. Tack on a hundred dollars or so for odds and ends--you might need a music stand, cable ties, etc.

That sounds like just over $3100 if you wanted to set up a home recording studio that would do all the basic stuff you need.

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Are maltipoo's a good dog for a college student?

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I have been wanting a dog for YEARS now and I finally have steady income and my own place. I am going to be living in a two bedroom apartment and wanted to make sure that that is an OK enviornment for a maltipoo. I have done some research on breeders and animal care and am wanting to purchase a dog this coming October. If anyone has any advice on which dogs are good for college students exd., please let me know!

Answer
You can never accurately predict the temperament or needs of a mix. Mutts (meant as a factual term referring to a mixed breed, not as an insult) don't adhere to breed standards, obviously, and the purpose of a high quality breeder is to strive toward the set breed standards. When there's no standard to follow, you don't know what you're going to get.

How much time do you have to dedicate to a dog? Maltese are prone to separation anxiety, so if you have many long classes, work many hours or are frequently out, they're a poor choice. Poodles are very active and clever dogs, so if they don't get plenty of stimulation and attention, they become bored and frustrated.. and a bored dog is a destructive, problematic dog. Both breeds require a good amount of grooming, so I assume a mix would require a fair chunk of time dedicated to daily/weekly grooming, too.

You mention buying one. One should never support the intentional breeding of two dogs who have just been slapped together. There are plenty of mixes in shelters. Unless one is responsibly aiming to create a new breed (in which case they must be an experienced breeder with a clear-cut goal, and they must know how to achieve it), no one has any business just sticking different breeds together. They're in it for the profit; such mixes are all the rage these days. (That's why shelters are full of 'em..)
If you're buying one, anyway, I assume that means you'd be buying a puppy. I don't think any student has the time to care for a puppy. They need CONSTANT supervision. I'm not exaggerating. In order to effectively housetrain a young puppy, they have to be watched ruthlessly! They're bundles of energy who cannot be left alone for very long at all.
And if you don't get a puppy, but get an adult (who would be much more suitable for your situation), then you oughtn't buy it. There's no reason not to adopt, in that case. No reason at all. In fact, there's no reason not to adopt even if you get a puppy. "Breeders" of "Maltipoos" are producing dogs who are absolutely no better quality, since, again, they're not adhering to a strict standard. A "Maltipoo" is a "Maltipoo" is a "Maltipoo."

An apartment is a fine environment for a Maltese or small Poodle, though, don't worry about that. Apartments are suitable for most breeds, as long as they're still sufficiently exercised outdoors.

What do you think of the first chapter of my book?

AwesomeDru

Chapter 1

It was 7:30 in the morning. The alarm clock beeped 5 times, before an arm flopped over and slapped the âOffâ button.
Craig awoke from his double bed and slowly crept up from his lying position. He put on some clothes, walked slowly down the hallway, leaning his hand against the wall at each step, and knocked on Andrewâs bedroom door.

âItâs time to go.â said Craig, through the still-closed bedroom door.

Andrew woke up, still quite tired. But, regardless, he stretched himself and grabbed a suit from his closet. After a few minutes, he opened his bedroom door, and walked out of his room, carrying the clothes he slept in to the dirty laundry basket.
On his way through, he stopped at the end of the hallway to listen in on what his dad was saying. He started a conference call with two phone numbers. Once both of the call receivers picked up their phones, Craig depressingly said a short phrase...

âItâs time to wake up and get going. You know where to go and, please, no in-laws or little ones.â

Andrew started to walk again as Craig hung up his phone, dug his forehead into the arm laying on the wall, and let out a long sigh.
Once Craig and Andrew were dressed up, they got into their cars and left. After about 25 minutes of driving, they arrived at their destination. They got out of their cars and walked up a set of stone stairs. They sat on a bench for a few more minutes and, eventually, another car pulled up. Craigâs oldest son, Daryl got out of the car, with a bundle of flowers in his hand. He walked up and sat on the bench with Craig and Andrew and they started to talk amongst themselves.
A little while into their conversation, a second car pulled up. A woman - Jennifer - Craigâs daughter, dropped her high-heel shoes on the ground and slipped her feet into them. She stood up out of the car, then, and she shut the door. Craig, Andrew and Daryl stood up from the bench, and all three started walking toward a decorative stone, with a deep container built into the ground in front of it. Jennifer placed her bundle of flowers into the container and the group of three looked solemnly at the writing on the stone...

âJeanne Dempsey
Mother of Three
Wife of Craig Dempsey
1960-2011"

Craig looked around, and then said: âIâd like to have a moment of silence, to respect your mother... my wife...â

No one objected, and they stood around the grave mourning quietly.


Then, seemingly out of nowhere, they hear a door slam. It turned out that Jennifer had actually brought her husband, Rick to the one-year anniversary of Jeanneâs death.

He abruptly and loudly said: âJennifer, are we going out to eat, or what?â

Instantly, Craig grew hot with anger and turned toward Jennifer.

âWhy did you bring Rick here, Jennifer?â
âI-I...â
âI thought I made myself clear; No children, and no in-laws! He is not part of this family and the children are just too young to understand. That is why I didnât want the in-laws here!â
Rick, hearing what Craig said, shouted: âHey, man! Donât tell me I ainât part of this family! I married your daughter; I am a part of this family!â
Craig responded, sternly: âNot in this aspect, youâre not. This isnât your mother... this isnât your wife. This is our lost loved one and it is intended to be a private gathering when we come here.â
âCraig, you gotta stop holding onto this, like itâs a special family gathering... ok, itâs not like itâs Christmas or Thanksgiving. Your wife died! Thatâs a personal matter, Iâll give you that. But, nothing about this is private!â
As Craig was starting to walk toward Rick, Jennifer stopped him, sighed and said: âI only brought him because he insisted that he come.â
Craig said, in disbelief: âYou mean he demanded he come...â
âDad, no... itâs not like that.â
Craig threw his hands up in exasperation and said: âOh... donât give me that bullcrap. Let me tell you something. Youâre soft. You listen to everything he says without an ounce of thought as to what it sucks out of your life, and of our private matters!â
âDad, when I listen to my husband and do something he asks of me, itâs called respect. Also... you know, he does have a point. Thereâs a difference between a personal matter and a private matter. This... is not a private matter; itâs a personal matter and a family matter. Rick is family!â
Craig looked around and then lowered his head in disappointment. âYou know, I thought you would be better than that. I thought you would be better than taking my son-in-laws side in something he doesnât have anything to do with... and, out of every day you could disrespect me like this, you choose the one-year anniversary of your motherâs death! Maybe you should just leave with him.â
âBut, Dad...â
âJust go... I donât need this happening on so difficult a day as this.â

Rest of chapter included in 'extra details'
Jennifer turned away from Craig, sprinted down the stone steps and got into her car. Rick looked at her, then looked up and straight into Craigâs eyes. They both stared down at each other with disappointment. But, then Rick got into Jenniferâs car, and they quickly drove off.


Craig turned around and headed back to Andrew and Daryl. He looked at the ground for a moment and sighed, then said near-broken-heartedly: âWell, the morningâs ruined... letâs go get breakfast.â
Craig and Andrew got in their car, while Daryl got into his own car. Then, they drove away from the Jeanneâs grave, headed for a nearby diner.

Answer
Couldn't read it all. What this story needs is a hook, for something interesting to happen. It was only the first few paragraphs when I stopped reading. You should interest me with the first line. The time of day isn't interesting.

Starting a story with the character waking up is cliche. It can be done, but you need to watch out for that. So the character wakes up, gets ready for the morning and, you know, what seems to be normal happens. This is fiction. You can make anything happen. Also, something you should think about if this would be the right place to start you're story. Consider a rewrite.

Good luck.

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